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please tell me what you think!..the topic is name a place,event, or object that has significance to you ( reflective essay) which are my dreams. The essay is suppose to have a intro( thesis), beginning, middle, and end


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Dreams are an Important aspect of everyone lives. It allows us to separate ourselves from life spiritually without leaving our bodies; Dreams can depict emotions, desires, feelings, memories, sounds, or even fantasies. What is the purpose of dreams? Is it a form of communication to god? Or is it a way of having something spiritually and emotionally that we can’t have in our physical forms? The world may never know the mysterious yet wondrous ways our dreams work.
	My dreams are my visual diary; I like to keep record of important places, memories, and sounds. Every time when I feel depressed, happy, or worried my dreams react to that feeling and I’ll envision myself in the middle of a garden, the birds are chirping in harmony, the sun is bright and radiant, the rivers are rich and pure, and the vegetables and fruits are luminous and moist. My dreams are the closest things to paradise, a place where I can just ignore the world and enjoy the night life. Sometimes I wonder why I always go to that place when I feel pressure from the conscious world, but when I wake up I feel rejuvenated; “dreams are like yoga to your soul,” it replenishes your mind, body, and spirit and it’s a great medicine emotionally. Many scientists believe the most common emotion experienced in dreams is anxiety. Other emotions include pain, abandonment, fear, joy, happiness, etc. Negative emotions are much more common than positive ones, why do most of us dream of negativity? Maybe it’s the way some of us are brought up or maybe its guilt from what happened during the day that we are afraid to face, so we deal with the outcome in our dreams.
	 Scientific studies reveal that most people daydream for a whopping 70-120 minutes per day. It starts with a compelling thought, memory, or fantasy about the future, and your imagination runs away. The longer you daydream, the deeper you become immersed in your private land. 
In daydreams, the right (creative) brain is dominant and you lose awareness of reality. Deeper worries or concerns will surface, usually by acting themselves out in the daydream. Also, when I dream I feel a stronger connection to god emotionally and I think that he communicates with everyone through their dreams, maybe why sometimes dreams are so surreal because he is trying to communicate with us and that’s why my dreams are significant to me. Dreams are liberating you can do whatever you want in them, if you like the feeling of a rush you can dream of you riding a motorcycle or skydiving off a plane! I dream of many places like traveling to different dream worlds since I don’t do enough of it in the real world and dreaming of my family members that had passed away, dreaming helps me to stay close to them and to just see them through my memories. My dreams are like the movie avatar, everything is so full of life and pureness, and it’s not tainted by pollution or negativity. When I dream of the garden all of my emotions are neutralized and I don’t feel anything but joy all of my negative feelings that I go through during the day had vanished into thin air. Many scientists have there on scientific explanations and theories of dreams, but in my opinion I think it’s just a form of communication to the spiritual word without actually leaving our bodies, it helps us to cope with the hardships of the real world and deal with them. In conclusion, dreams are fascinating and important; it can be a stress reliever, a way for you to escape from life, or to just face your fears, either way it’s a fulfilling experience.

Anonymous · Accepted Answer

Yes. don't say "in conclusion'. Just write your concluding sentence.

movie, "Avatar";

joy. All

bodies. It

fears. Either

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Birth Name: Rillian; now R(changed name) 1. Awful experiences. I was often teased as child for not having a real name. As a teenager friends insisted on calling me Killian after the cheap beer Killians. In college I found that I wasn't getting scholarships or other opportunities while people with lower grades and less experience in the same subject were. I changed my name legally and almost immediately people who only knew me on paper started taking me seriously. An example: I originally applied to graduate schools as Rillian. I had an undergrad 4.0 but I didn't get a single offer. The next year--having done no extra coursework and with the same personal statement--I reapplied with the changed name and was accepted with funding to all eight universities to which I had applied. I think this is a fairly clear example of a name holding a person back. 2. My name comes from the name of a prince in the Narnia series (my mother has an obsession). To make the name "feminine" she added an extra L. I don't think it worked. 3. Personally I don't like Rillian, but I'm used to it. I still answer to it and my family still calls me it. What I really don't like is how it worked on a professional level. 4. I'd rather not say what I changed my name to on the internet, sorry. 5. Rillian and R(changed name). Rillian with family, sometimes with my husband (we were dating when I changed it). We've moved since I changed my name, so everyone in my new city only knows me by my new name. 6. I didn't change my last name when I got married, mostly because I had just changed my first name a year before and didn't feel like doing the paperwork again. I may get around to it one day, I may not. 7. They're OK. My maiden name and my husband's last name sound awful with each other, so it's not an option I am personally considering.

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