Not feeling good about our chances for survival. Short poem for you. Comment?

Trains only run on tracks

faster since the days of steam.

Rail out ahead, you say?

Our best hope now

wake up and find

we're still inside a dream.

I really enjoyed your poem. Thanks.

The point is interesting, possibly thought provoking, but a tongue-out icon of Albert with that nick is a bit TOO, y'know?!? ;-) Though I like it, in the way I like something written for the exercise, like a well turned phrase in answer to a homework assignment. It's typically depressing and hopeless with my pet peeve about commentary in general (Since I deal with other's comments day in and day out as a technical editor and program coordinator!): Don't tell me what's wrong, show me what's righter!

ARRRR! Where is Albert!

Your poem is of course true. Do you know how long the dinosaurs were on Earth? We are not even a patch on that length of time. Have you seen any dinosaurs lately?

easily, not a bad interest. the ny situations needs to be italicized nonetheless, or you need to apply a obscure connection with "that usually used paper" or some thing- comparable with great. The dashes and dots are a great no no whilst it is composed of grammar, or could I say getting it revealed, yet do not permit that end you (the terrific occasion may be the writings of Dickenson in poetry, an editor did away with all her dashes and it sent her into hiding.) With the way you used the dimensions and shape of phrases to punctuate you will possibly not choose them to form meter and pass, seems ok to me, yet i in my view might get rid of the repeated dashes, think of e.e. cummings

This Is a Great Poem! Keep up the Good Work!:)

and I asked for a feel good poem what is this Noah?

trying to make me more depressed than I already was?

oh darn, why can't a broken nail assuage my brain and make me think it is the most important thing to deal with..

good morning and flip this over and give me something hopeful... even if it is a lie

Yes, and looking at your tongue, Doc,

I see what you mean.

real nice.Einstien.write some more words of truth and wisdom.

peace