I want you to check my writing please??]?

Seriously, is English your first language? The story is very poorly worded, and you use expressions wrong. {I am overlooking the poor typing and paragraphing here on Y!A.} You also have run-on sentences and end illogically. {Reaching your destination is NOT fun if you are there to attend a funeral, or even a bad business meeting.}

Instead of saying "I am going to tell you about my first flight" - because that is obvious by the fact that you are writing this article start in more directly:

My first flight happened ...

My first flight was when ...

I became excited and happy when my sister told me we were flying to ______. I was looking forward to my first airline flight and arriving at my dream destination. But first, we had to navigate the airport and get onto the airplane. The crowds were thick and the lines were long, so my sister and I passed the time by discussing our upcoming adventures in ______.

etc, etc. as you carry on telling the rest of your narrative about how everything went and what you did.

Everyone likes to travel from country to another but there are many reasons people travel ; it maybe for Treatment, business, or for having fun. I am going to tell you about my first flight.

It was when my sister told me we are going to ______ . I was really excited I was going to be flying ! I couldn't believe I was going to_______ I always wanted to go! My dreams had come true at last . When we got to the airport the place was huge there were many people standing up in queues . I thought I was going to be lost but thank GOD I didn't. When we had finished all the preparations, we waited for hours. Luckily, it wasn't boring because we talked about the places we are going to visit and so on in ____. After waiting for hours we walked to the air plane. It wasn't fun because we were outside and the wind decided to mess our hair up ! The best thing was when we were on the plane where they served us food ; it was so delicious, it tasted better than __________!

Everyone have their own stories about their first flight. It may be really fun, boring or even scary but for sure when you reach the place you wanted, you will be delighted by the change of scene.

the ____________ are for your own words e.t.c and really well done!!!

Emma x

Yeah it is fun! i have gone 2 many places and it was really fun at the airport wen u hav somethin 2 do like plane sightin !

Which airport did u go?

I went to Chhatrapati Shivaji Airport, Mumbai

good 1 make it short and be to the point