anyone critique this for me?

pretty cliche, but I've just been smoking lately so I wrote about it.

Gotta get that drug loot welcome to the huddle

Smoking mad trees now we’re burnin down the jungle

we’re just blowin smoke and that’s no lie

got a birds eye view im flyin so high

blunts that smell like fruit loops

swishers we don’t shoot hoops

no lamp but I light it like I’m Gretzky

been blazed since the day my mother met me

kush rules everything around me

**** gettin cake I just make brownies

I do what makes me happy

pickin up a halfy

Spittin like im daffy

Hotboxin with shaggy in his van

Pursuin happiness I’m will smith man

Smoking like the kid on my wristband

And if you want weed then bring the ruckus

Hit me up I’ll get ya something to **** with

Ask me if ill smoke another pound this summer

Ill tell ya you can count on it like a number

On the beach in a flower shirt like im rango

Rollin up weed that taste like peach and mango

Away on vaca headed to the tropics

If we don’t look fresh then please adjust your optics

Head to toe we’re trendin like topics

They can’t understand what we’re on though

I’m goin over their heads like my condo

So to them I’m still a john doe

But they’re gonna get it soon like pronto

Im too big for the sea these fish are in

Set to detonate like nitroglycerin

With ice cold words doin cryosurgery

Freezer burn verbs to the third degree

Im jack the dipper on a murder spree

Status says im catchin rays in key west

In paradise youd think im chillin with jesus

Written loosely to this http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=25ftvkmmUPk