please critique this verse?

I know I'm not good yet, that's why i'm asking for constructive criticism. If you just wanna be a dick at least rate it out of 10 for me. Thanks for your time.

We stay doin everything you’re dreaming of

They say we’re killing sicker than leukemia

Come taste the flows we’re spilling and scheming up

Alienated ill children are beaming up

One day I’ll have

people I meet call me by my last name

I wanna ride easy street pass in the fast lane

Pushin a buck twenty ridin that cash lane

Every time I pickup drop a couple hundred

Youre comin to a stop but bein so aggressive I just gun it

Leavin these kids breathless getting impressive even stunning

Sea legs from my 40 you can call me captain

In my car lookin sporty im a caps fan

Rockin the red they talkin my rep im coughin like strep

So often you bet im the highest around

Up in a jet im the flyest in town

Ill sleep when im dead my life is to lounge

Pursuin happiness im will smith man

Doin half of this for the kid on my wristband

They startin to orbit around this dope mind

The kid is imported his sound is so fine

Never a day are they sick of my style

Shine like a ray im makin them smile

My future is bright like a flash grenade

I’m bout to get high with an aspen babe

Getting wet tonight like im catchin a wave