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I need this article I'm writting for work to retain all it's information, but hopefully flow better, and it also could use some rewording, so it doesn't sound as repetative. Also I haven't done an conclusion, so that would be helpful too... Thanks in advance.

What health benefits does Craminals™ provide for my pet?

Craminals™ harnesses the power of certified organic cranberries, an antioxidant-rich super food. Free radicals in the body are responsible for cell damage which can affect tissues, arteries and organs. The antioxidants in Cranimals™ Original helps maintain eye and organ function by preventing muscle deterioration caused by free radicals. Research also suggests that cranberries retain properties that fight cancer, boost immunity and contribute to digestive tract and urinary tract health. Cranberries have been classified as an anti-carcinogenic food, meaning they reduce the severity of cancer and or prevent it. In addition, cranberries are considered anti-angiogenic, simply put, they promote the healing of cells, keeping benign tumors from becoming malignant. Natural anti-bacterial and anti-viral assets contained within the berries boost overall immunity. Proanthocyanidins(PACs) found in cranberries also inhibits the overgrowth of Escherichia Coli (E. Coli), a naturally occurring bacteria found in the lower digestive tract, balancing the digestive system. Quinic acid obtained from cranberries, lowers the formation on calcium and magnesium phosphate crystals, which ultimately form kidney stones in the urinary tract. Anti-inflammatory properties possessed by cranberries also contribute to urinary tract health by improve the function of kidney capillaries (nephrons) which expel toxins from the blood stream.

In addition to cranberries the Very Berry formula, contains raspberries and blueberries. Raspberries provide a unique molecule called Ellagitannins, which may destroy cancerous cells. Phenolic compounds, which can be found in blueberries, have been shown to relax blood vessels, reduce blood pressure and lower blood cholesterol. Similarly, blueberries can reverse age-related neurological defects by promoting cell restoration.

Cranimals™ Vibe is a detoxification supplement, comprised of cranberries, dried seaweed and spirulina. Studies show that dried seaweed contains 10 to 20 times more vitamins, minerals and essential amino acids then vegetables grown on land. Seaweed also maintains heart health by clearing plaque buildup from arteries. Omega oils found in seaweed contribute to healthy skin, improve luster of the coat and decrease shedding. Spirulina is a blue-green algea commonly used for his detoxification capabilities. It has proven to be effective in aiding the production of red and white blood cells, promoting healing. Spirulina may also aid in the digestion and absorption of other vitamins and minerals, as well as lower cholesterol. Likewise, Chlorophyll, which gives seaweed and spirulina it’s green colour, is high in fibre, and aids in digestion.

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  • ?
    Lv 6
    10 years ago
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    You have done an excellent job of writing this article. Your research is obvious and there are no spelling, punctuation or grammar errors. It was a pleasure to read!

    Your question has two misspelled words though...

  • Todd
    Lv 7
    10 years ago

    I'm not finishing the sentences, but I hope this helps a little bit...

    Last part of first paragraph should be, "by improving"

    First part of second paragraph should be, "In addition to cranberries, the Very Berry formula contains" The comma is in the wrong spot.

    I think in that paragraph, also, it should be, "Phenolic compounds that are found in blueberries have been"

    Third paragraph has, "amino acids then", which should be "amino acids than"

    Same paragraph has, "his detoxification capabilities", which should be "its detoxification capabilities"

    Technically, you are supposed to use a comma between everything in a series, including the final "and". You use "a, b and c" whereas "a, b, and c" is correct. You do this throughout the article. In my humble opinion, to me, that's splitting hairs a little, but that's the common practice and it makes logical sense. In the former, it separates a from the grouping b and c, but in the latter, all of them are easily seen as part of the group. It's the same rules with "or". Note, if it's only two items in the series then there is no need for the comma before the "and" or "or".

    Source(s): I'm not very good at english grammar, but it follows some of the same guidelines as SQL, which I am good at.
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