Can you rate my creative quasi-poetic writing? ^_^?

Hello!

I was wondering if some of you would be willing to rate and critique my writing. I enjoy my writing, but I'm not sure if I'm just egocentric, or if it's actually interesting. So I've turned to you guys for help :D My writing is of a poetic nature, and it's meant to be abstract and non-linear. I don't really know how to describe it better than that, so here it is!

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Oh my God, what have I done? I loved you, I swear I did. This wasn't supposed to end like this. ****, I'm sorry I tied you up. I'm sorry that you're delicate body is marred by fibrous imprints. Let's go back... Let's start again; let's pretend this never happened. We can do that, right? The gag over your mouth... It was all too much. Christ, I scratched at your waistline, didn't I? Who is inside of me? Who am I?

It didn't happen. You're a liar! No one will believe you anyway. Our history is antiquated by now and you don't even know the truth!

How can you even know what happened that night? Neither of us know anything... And now you're right here in front of me! You're right here in front of me and you're bleeding. It's all my fault. I'm sorry.

Forgive me of my iniquities. I've hurt you and thousands more. I've destroyed the entire human race; I've impregnated the world; I've intoxicated the children of this planet.

Cursed, I am! Cursed, we are! We're in this together. Don't pretend this is all my fault. We've known each-other for so long. We've nursed at the same breast, we've laughed together, cried together... And now this? A betrayal of the nth degree! You've hurt me just as much as I've hurt you. Gosh, but you looked so cute... You looked so delicate and helpless. You wanted to trip me up. You wanted me to hurt you! Yes, this is what it's always been about. You've always been an attention whore. I swear that you've murdered me thousands of times before.

I've seen your face in past lives. You've always been the one following me, waiting for me to make the smallest of miscalculations. You've pounced again... You've orchestrated the Third Reich, protested the protestors of Tiananmen square, brought Rwanda to its knees! You were never convicted of assisting in Thích Quảng Đức's suicide, but I know you had your claws in there somehow!

How long have you been stalking me? It's beginning to make sense now.

I know what you're up to.

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Please let me know what you think! Please be honest!

Also, if there's anyone out there who's really proficient at writing, they should email me! I'm trying to write a book, but I'm not sure if it's good or not. I'd like someone to read a paragraph or two and let me know if it has potential!

Thanks ^_^