format for the perfect AP world history compare and contrast essay?

first, i would like to thank you for answering this. this means a lot to me. please listen to what i have to say first, if you don't mind (i'm trying to be as humble as possible, because i really need these answers):

i am a freshman, and i am taking AP world history. my school offers AP classes in freshman year. I stupidly thought i could handle it. i would like to improve my GPA by improving my essays. my teacher bases the essay on 5 criterion:

- thesis

- claim

- evidence

- direct comparison

- analysis

my first essay's thesis was "Although mesopotamia and egypt had differences in worship and geological features, polytheism and class division made them similar." she took off points. i dont know why

my second essay's thesis was "India and china had differences in political structures and religious structures, but had similarities in social structures." she took off points for being "too broad". how should i make it less broad?

my essays grades improved from essay 1 to 2 (i got a 40% on the first essay. my second essay was a 50%. YAY! this doesnt seem good, but everyone else basically got the same grade as me, so i'm aiming for improvement, although an A+ would be tearjerkingly glorious. i would start bawling on the floor)

i improved on my claim, but i only got half of the maximum amount of points in the evidence criteria. she said i didnt use direct comparison. i did though, but i placed them in opposite sides of the paragraph (one in the beginning, one at the end). she gave me half the max points in evidence criteria, like previously stated, but zero points on direct comparison.

does direct comparison have to be NEXT TO EACH OTHER? for example, if i were comparing china and india's government structure, do i have to say for example, "China was centralized while India was regional."

if i said that, would that count for evidence AND direct comparison? isnt direct comparison for evidence? arent they interdependent?

what i ABSOLUTELY DO NOT UNDERSTAND is analysis. i thought i did WONDERFUL (sorry for the extreme emphasis) but i get my essays back and they're always zero points. the second essay was a compare and contrast essay on india and china. my analysis for their difference in government. i said verbatim, "the indian classical civilization's politics mostly revolved around religion. Hinduism, india's biggest religion, is very tolerant. for example, they tolerated minority's religion, Buddhism. Since Hinduism's tolerance influenced the Indian politics, Indian politics became very tolerant of diversity. There was no linguistic unity (unlike the Chinese). In another aspect, there was no ruler that permanently unified India, unlike China's Shi Huangdi.

^i thought i did perfect on the analysis. what am i doing wrong?

if it isnt too much trouble, can you thoroughly explain my mistakes and what the correct way to write a compare and contrast essay is? like i previously said, i got a 40 and a 50. i want to pass for once!