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WATCHER asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 9 years ago

Please critique this poem?

Fallen deer

Two pronged buck

Smacked in the head

By a pickup truck.

Glassy eyes

Stare ahead

All broke up

You're better off dead.

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  • 9 years ago
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    That's dark and sad... but put together very well, good job.

  • 9 years ago

    definitely gave me a good laugh... I apologize for not being able to help with the critiquing, though.

  • 9 years ago

    Deeeeeeeeep...

  • Anonymous
    9 years ago

    shoot,

    road kill

    spilled guts

    no pill,

    made a mess of my truck

    can I keep the antlers?

    not a chance

    I hate - really hate

    this circumstance

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