a love triangle....sorta...c/c?

Question

your cancer stalks you like  a lover 
paused beneath a window to inquire 
with his 
intrusive and invasive nature if 
you have perhaps forgotten that you 
belong 
to him he has winnowed you out from 
your friends and co-workers 
to isolate you to mold you to consume you and 
i am a threat for i distract you. 
but like with all disfunctional relationships, 
you are both his victim and his cohort. 
bringing your lover with you 
to every meeting every conversation every encounter. 
we have lunch and the table is set for 
two but he is there, 
seated in a chair , 
distracting you from life.
 my idle hands find my silverware, 
a fork and a spoon. 
i clasp the dull-edged butterknife in my 
unsteady hands and i 
lunge across the table at your 
unwelcome lover. 
i stab him and i 
stab and i stab and i stab and i 
stab. 
but he cannot be incised from 
your existance 
and my arms grow 
weary 
from the weight 
of the knife.

? · Accepted Answer

It
began
consuming, 
from the inside 
out,with you knowing
that it grows in hiding
burrowing tunnels deep 
willing to over shadow life's
distraction, is all he ever needs
to supply his never ending focus
You can be there, every minute with Love

Good to see you Sin
...Yes it is!

Anonymous · Answer

Courtney Love

? · Answer

That is exactly how it is. I never had a more vivid picture in my mind from any poem, EVER than I just did from the lunge to the dropped knife. Fade to black. That changed the world in the stillness and void after.

I wonder if everyone of us has lost someone or is losing someone to cancer, because it is everywhere. 

And it is big money for some organizations, that scares me more than anything.

I could go on, but I won't, I just want to stay here a moment, hum a soft song and hold your hand. *sigh*

Anonymous · Answer

Seems personal as hell. 

I have to say the rawness works in favour of this, and I like the contrast of it jumping out at the reader in a hurried pace...up until the last four lines, which ease everything up and puts it in perspective.

Rosalinda · Answer

Hi.  How  sweet  and sad love poem.  there may be no words to express what this poem, makes me feel.  Very heart touching. This is a hard situation to live with. Nice image.

Yesu Ben · Answer

the repeated stabbing indicates a personal vexation against something or someone who will carry this unwelcome lover off.  Absolutely brilliant!

doe · Answer

I miss your creative passion. I love when I see you've posted, you never disappoint. I love the use of the word winnowed - excellent. You are wonderful.

neonman · Answer

Strong and moving, great ending to a sad tale.  I can only imagine a parent watching their child battle.

Anonymous · Answer

Maybe a time out in the corner is doable?  

I have missed your words.

Intrusivosity With Medium Doubt · Answer

I'm kind of intrusiv...
.., yet oddly
multiple punctures in my core 
are sort'a hot (in an American Horror Story
kind of way).
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.above dots are bits of non-vital organs.

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