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How are these beginnings, in your opinion?

It's opinion, obviously, and they're different stories but if you have any commentary, go for it! :D Pick your favorite!

------ Beginning 1 ------

Late in the winter of my seventeenth year, my mother decided I was depressed, presumably because I rarely left the house, spent quite a lot of time in bed, read the same book over and over, ate infrequently, and devoted quite a bit of my abundant free time to thinking about death.

Whenever you read a cancer booklet or website or whatever, they always list depression among the side effects of cancer. But, in fact, depression is not a side effect of cancer. Depression is a side effect of dying. (Cancer is also a side effect of dying. Almost everything is, really.) But my mom believed I required treatment, so she took me to see my Regular Doctor Jim, who agreed that I was veritably swimming in a paralyzing and totally clinical depression, and that therefore my meds should be adjusted and also I should attend a weekly Support Group.

This Support Group featured a rotating cast of characters in various states of tumor-driven unwellness. Why did the cast rotate? A side effect of dying.

-------- Beginning 2 ----------

In the past week (unquestionably the worst seven days of her life), she’d lost the ability to distance herself from the memories. Too often lately in her dreams it was 1974; she was a teenager again, coming of age in the shadow of a lost war, riding her bike beside her best friend in a darkness so complete it was like being invisible. The place was relevant only as a reference point, but she remembered it in vivid detail: a meandering ribbon of asphalt bordered on either side by gullies of murky water and hillsides of shaggy grass. Before they met, that road seemed to go nowhere at all; it was just a country lane named after an insect no one had ever seen in this rugged blue and green corner of the world.

-------- Beginning 3 --------

I gaze at the small, crisp, burned-out black husks scattered across the chipped white paint of the windowsills. It is hard to believe that they were ever alive. I wonder what it would be like to be shut up in this airless glass box, slowly baked for two long months by the relentless sun, able to see the outdoors—the wind shaking the green trees right there in front of you—hurling yourself again and again at the invisible wall that seals you off from everything that is real and alive and necessary, until eventually you succumb: scorched, exhausted, overwhelmed by the impossibility of the task. At what point does a fly give up trying to escape through a closed window—do its survival instincts keep it going until it is physically capable of no more, or does it eventually learn after one crash too many that there is no way out? And what point do you decide that enough is enough?

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  • ?
    Lv 4
    9 years ago
    Favorite Answer

    In all honesty I think they were all really good, depressing, but very well written!

    I really liked the third on, though Im not sure why. I really liked the whole thing with the fly, because know ever really stops to think about insugnificant stuff like that.

    So the third is my favorite, but I liked them all :)

  • 9 years ago

    Love all 3 of them, the first is really intriguing, it's able to entrance us with the first person narrative, and a less comonly discussed theme.

    Second one stands on it's own with a very promising start and splendid descriptions

    The third is very unique, interesting, and provides us with something new.

    But I like the first one, just because I love the concept , the second and third though entertaining is not something I'd prefer to read, I love stories related to depressions etc. My judgement is biased so don't really consider it of any imprtance, go with what you feel comfortable. I also liked the third, it had a very special aura to it.

  • Anonymous
    9 years ago

    They are all pretty depressing, but I'm assuming that's the point. I like the third one the best. Nice hook.

    Source(s): I'm opinionated. ;D
  • 9 years ago

    They're all good and the writing is nice. I personally like the 3rd one the most!

    :D

  • Lex
    Lv 4
    9 years ago

    I think 1 is better :/

  • Anonymous
    9 years ago

    I only had time to read the first but oh muh guuush, its great!

    Source(s): Yay
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