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ttteo0328
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ttteo0328 asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 9 years ago

A first try to haiku,please C/C.?

Bonsai twisted twigs

Many a great scenery

A poetry in it

Update:

Thanks for that comment,shall improve.

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  • Nat
    Lv 7
    9 years ago
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    Very clever to think of the Bonsai.

    I like this very much.

    I have a question for you.

    Source(s): if you would email me...I have a question. My address is on my activity page. thanks Gene.
  • lovechild
    Lv 7
    9 years ago

    I think this is a decent haiku, but truly I am not too fond of the form. In English they just feel weird to me. Only opinion and I have seen people do this well so if you like it, write more. Lots of people like them.

  • Rosalinda
    Lv 7
    9 years ago

    Hi i like your haiku poem it is different, work on the last line a bit.

  • men
    9 years ago

    to be honest it really is below average :( haiku's are hard cause you are limited with the stanzas and all but ive read haiku's that made me really THINK.

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  • -
    Lv 7
    9 years ago

    The first two lines are good, but the last is disappointing.

    Maybe "poetical view"???

  • Happy Hiram
    Lv 7
    9 years ago

    I can visualize it. The last line is self-fulfilling.

  • Adah
    9 years ago

    its okay...you should do better

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