what does anyone have to say about this song I wrote?

keep in mind, I write vocal harmonies like Simon and Garfunkel, so these are not intended to be pop. anyways, it doesn't have a name yet, like many of the songs I have written.

The moonlight seeps through my window

But it's crowded out by my lamplight

I wore down the road chasing a glow

I watched an empty day fade to night

Why can't I sleep?

Wandering deep

Through the midnight's keep

I stagger

My eyes may shut, though I can't sleep

And I hope that my slumber comes soon

There's a memory that I must seek

Yet I know that it cannot be true

Why can't I sleep?

Lonely thoughts creep

In the midnight's keep

They hold her

The moonlight seeps through my window

Now the hesitant pen comes to write

Life's loneliest songs like the winds blow

Let my silent ways kiss me goodnight

Let my emptiness hug the moonlight

I know. I was always a more melancholy writer...