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Is this a good Prologue?
I look into his eyes and feel my own eyes burn brighter from the intensity of his loving gaze. He continues to whisper words that continue to make me melt, I love him. I choose him. No, I can’t choose yet, I have to find the other who also makes my soul ache. The one who is good for me and not a disgrace upon my family, the one who I’ve felt love for from the beginning.
“Please, do not leave me.”
“I must go, you are not good for me. For anyone, I do not love you and I never will love you.” I say even though the words are like acid in my mouth.
“Because I am no guardian angel you choose him, because I am an angel who chose freedom over being a slave.”
“We are not slaves! We serve God as you should have, being near you will get me banished and I do not wish to become fallen for someone unworthy.”
“You find me unworthy, yet your soul shines brighter when I am near. Does it not?” His gray eyes burn light purple as they do whenever he is aggravated. I didn’t mean to anger him, but I also do no wish to anger God. I choose God over a miniscule love affaire that is most likely all in my head.
“It shines brighter out of disgust, you abandoned us and now you wish to be with me? You have brought shame on yourself and this shame is unredeemable. I am a guardian, therefore if I do love it is only another guardian. It is only John, I only love him. You mean nothing to me and I wish for you to leave, Seth. He and I are both guardian angels and we would not be a shameful pair. I’m going to leave you now, forever.” I say before taking a step back, I unfurl my glorious pure white wings, they miss the ground by less than a centimeter and they reach at least two feet above me. They are two times wider than me, and although they are strong and powerful they are very soft and delicate.
I launch into the sky leaving Seth behind, I must forget him now that I have chosen John. I must forget him until the end of time and then long after that.
3 Answers
- ?Lv 49 years agoFavorite Answer
I really like the name Seth, first of all. :3 Second, I think it's interesting. I'm not really sure if I would keep reading because I've never really liked pure romance novels. I like romantic side-plots with more action.
- 9 years ago
hmm well this sounds like a story than a prologue, a prologue should introduce what may happen in the story but not with many hints like you did. Just my opinion. Also I've read many books and all the prologues don't have a conversation. Sometimes prologues can be used to ask something to the reader so they will want to look what is in the novel. It sounds a like good story even though it is not my type,don't like romantic novels but it took my attention :)
- 9 years ago
i like it but be careful Angels and God are Religous topics and when writing about these one must be considerate of the respective Religion.