I need help with my cover letter and my grammar is terrible!?

I've taken the liberty of correcting your grammar and changing certain sentences that didn't quite 'fit'. Really, your grammar isn't bad. You just need the letter to be more cohesive and flowing.

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I was referred by a colleague/friend of mine to your advertisement for activities personnel on Sunday evening and I was eager to learn more about it. I have heard numerous people mention what a wonderful place Home Sweet Home is for seniors, so when I discovered that there was a vacant position, I applied immediately. While I was filing an application for the position, I was sitting with some individuals on the couch overlooking the Hudson River. Among other things, we discussed the different boats that sailed past and how serene and relaxing the view was.

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For the past ten years, I have worked with disabled seniors, helping them create a fulfilling life for themselves at our centre [name of centre]. I have found it to be a very rewarding experience. During my time with management, we were able to donate a PC and large monitor and tablets for our seniors group for activities and individual use. Many of my colleagues thought they would never learn how to adjust to modern technology, but their optimism and persistence soon removed those thoughts; we were pleased to learn that they could navigate the internet with ease! Google Earth has enabled the seniors to visit places they people grew up and discover many new locations around the world. This has created many new relationships and given them a sense of closure. Furthermore, the seniors can now watch their favorite old TV shows many thought they would never see again online. This has illuminated the significance of technology and has provided other means of entertainment.

With my background in the arts, I have created entertaining music group sessions using various instruments such as the piano, bongos, guitars and other percussion instruments. Karaoke is also a favorite. We have participated in local art shows (we have a watercolor series coming up for the ArtsWalk in Hudson this year), and have begun practicing a form of Tai Chi that I studied at a seminar in Rochester. This course was specifically made for the elderly and disabled. The people I work with love practicing “Chi Time”.

We often try to create a college atmosphere and study topics on a week-long basis. We have studied famous artists, the solar system, deep sea creatures and other themes the seniors have chosen themselves. We try to make most activities more active rather than passive. For example, using discussion groups after a movie or utilizing many types of bingo games (food/money/animal bingo) for a fun learning experience.

Even though my primary position is as a counselor lately my duties have consisted of staff training, being an assistant with transportation around the Columbia-Greene area, CPR instructor and other staffing. These roles have allowed me to illustrate my helping nature and leadership with seniors.

If I could be in an environment where I could concentrate my abilities to help seniors have satisfying lives, I know that my skills would be utilized to their fullest. Home Sweet Home and its friendly atmosphere is an opportunity I would like to learn more about.

If you would like to discuss my background or previous experience further, please contact me on 518 653 9816. I can usually be reached after 3:30pm. I can also be contacted at waltermahar@gmail.com.

If I am unfortunate in attaining the role, please consider me for volunteer work.*

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All the best.