Can someone please critique my songwriting and producing?

It has a really nice acoustic feel and up beat tempo. I liked it!

Keep it up!!

j:)

Nice

Cassie, i'm many times accused of being a cheeky wee tinker... so i have tinkered consisting of your sonnet. i recognize i have blanketed the archaic "e'er", which some discover distasteful, yet i do not care, coz I says it in authentic life, tay!!! How might want to i recognize that grief might want to take position, to instruct itself with such fleeting marvel, lengthy because his unhappy departure from this earth? Such heart-felt lack of his abrupt death for his youthful daughter, who can not remember one unmarried memory of his good-looking body. Or recognize the feeling of his loving fingers that cradled her as comfortable, he spoke her call. No given tenderness can help erase. No kiss, nor soothing stroke of her sweet face, can e’er eliminate the vacuum that’s known, which she ought to study the thanks to handle, and replace. in spite of the indisputable fact that she's lost him, it really is her objective, to pitch her stake and make her rightful declare.