Can anybody give me a more stronger metaphor to use?

The thoughts I'm having are criminal...

Good morning, I don't know about a stronger metaphor, but do have some suggestions.

It should be hoped certainly that she shares a sense of love for you. I might not have used "baby" however.

"represents" is a stumble for me, especially repeated, though in the "only represents" line I might have not used "only" unless it's alluded to, while not being the actual sense of touch and move touch up a line, then drop the second "represents" and maybe use "express"

"God only made several colors" UM I'd change that, and maybe even elaborate on what colors you might feel in knowing and loving her.

I did enjoy the Gender you placed on God.

In the line that begins with "that" and speaks of imagination, "I'd drop "that"

in the last 3 lines, I'd go emotional, not leaving it up to her to figure out the depth of your feelings.

in the "your touch" line I might have added, "The warmth of"

The track with the internal maximum which capacity and the main hidden metaphors is i'm Too sexy by employing ultimate pronounced Fred. See, the catwalk is a euphemism for diplomacy and the shirt represents the repressed id yearning the superego delight of the 8 Fold course. Oh, it is deep. DEEP, i'm telling you.

Colors are the best use, I think.

This poem is for me, huh? I was a senior, once.

Well, if you count my current age, I'm still a senior, Ha ! I don't go out with younger men, though

...My love

words left my sanity trying

to describe this emotions I

have for you

Cut me open and deep inside

you'll find warmth in my

liver my guts

A warmth that burns

My heart pumping

blood that flows

only

for you

And when you are through

seeking for my

words

Stitch me back up

and call

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Lose the adverb(s).

This poem works, even with tongue planted in cheek.

Actions speak more ticklishly than words.

Stronger than `Sun`?....

Galaxy?

`I painted for you a galaxy -

Well, to be honest, it wasn`t just me....`

I know you had fun writing this as I had fun reading it.

GIVE ME 5 DOLLARS AND I HELP U TO FILL IT D:

Color me red, lover boy!