Is There a Flaw in the Premise of This Poem?

No, none at all.

You might carry white pepper ? :) .

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5 sneezes have the equivalent reliedf-value of 1 orgasm.

I held that in my mental file of

`Interesting yet-not-dinner-talk-information` adeline.

Glad it`s out there now...

(Hi, we think similarly at times, I notice .).

ps.. My place is split-level = 2 floors :D

Adeline

Very nice composition you have created, in poetic style of course.

A thoughtful and honest subject as well.

The actual event of sexual intimacy is a God given gift that has been

tremendously abused. My life did not go unscathed, the the ship was

righted in due time.

Though a gift, it should not be at the top of the list of any relation, and

that is what I see and why so many men end up in the Castration line,

and so many women resort to boob jobs and all types of cosmetic

surgery.

Gift of exceedingly delicious pleasure? Yes, yet over-rated. Stuff like

snuggling, just laying there with your mate, making out, holding hands,

all great stuff to preclude the main deal, or even obviate if ya feel like it.

A good sneeze as a replacement sometimes. Good one.

My preference is a nice, relaxing Bowel Movement, reading the sports

pages, and making sure I double wipe to save on TP.

Congrats

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hmm....sneezing aint in the same category.

Trust me on this, I sneeze like 4 to 6 times a day

glad to see ya back

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edit: To simply answer your question: The premise is FALSE

thus the whole raison de existance of your poem is invalidated

but, other than that it is a good poem

The point to this poem is that sexual intimacy should be more than just a physical release.

A man who can look at you with sexual desire when you are on the verge of a sneeze is a keeper.

The poem is clever, and neatly expressed. If it is honest, then it has value. The feminine rimes - given the topic - are particularly elegant.

It is at least as well written as Brian Wilson's 'Do it again.' But whenever I hear those opening lines:

It's automatic - when I

Talk with old friends

The conversation - turns to

Girls we knew whose

Hair was soft and long

And the beach was the place to go.

I find I am so disturbed with what Mr. Wilson just told me about his core sexuality that I can hardly pay attention to anything the song says intentionally.

Wisdom often is conveyed

in brief, well voiced poems

and , as shown here,

can be quiet effective

with a clincher ending.

A biting write with legs, DF.

Was it not Aristotle who astutely found the correlation between a sneeze and sexual thought? Your poem carries a humorous subtlety to it that almost made me sneeze! Enjoyed.

Hmm...wondering why it is saying "When a good sneeze gives sweet release and similar elation".

My answer, not really.

It takes ten sneezes to release the same amount of dopamine as one orgasm.

Bless you!

So,like, you just sit there sneezing at each other,or what?