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I want to be better for you. I want to be the man you deserve. I bleed, I fall, I reach for goals yet I can never attain them. I fight for a better life only to end up where I started. I sweat and claw to prove myself so as to be worthy of a prize like you. When I'm with you my heart races at the slightest touch of your skin. When I see your face my throat tightens and my breathe can't escape my lungs cause I'm fighting, praying that this moment will never end. I want to be a better man not just so I can be with you but so that I might be worthy of the vision of perfection, the beginning, the end, the absolute angel that you and only you could ever be.

Elena · Accepted Answer

that is one of the most beautiful poems i have ever read.. and i'm not just saying that  c: .... did you right this master piece?

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josh, I think you express 'love' perfectly..and that's very hard.some poems sound icky and slushy..you manage to say the words some may paper over because its too near the bone for them to write..its hard to write about how you love every crease in a girls dress and a bit of hair that still hangs down when she ties it back, the beautiful smell of her that remains after she has gone,its what we see...not 'you are a ray of golden light and brighten up my darkest days-'**** off'! so never stop writing mate, I myself have got through very bad times by writing and not fighting..can I put your poem on my blogsite?

Chelesea · Answer

That poem is seriously beautiful!
I have never heard a poem that great!
I literally almost had a tear coming out of my eyeball no joke
I love it! It was amazing and I'm not just saying that 
I seriously think its great! :)

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