Is this a good personal statement for post-16?

I'm currently studying for 10 GCSEs in which I will complete in 2014, I plan to take Psychology, Maths, Biology and English literature at A level. My favorite subjects that I currently study are Religious studies, Maths and English.

My skills include: Mathematical skills, problem solving, Listening, reading and working in both team and individual tasks.Teachers and friends would describe me as: trustworthy, hardworking, intelligent, sympathetic and compassionate.

Outside of school my hobbies are both music and theatre. I attend regular band practice and have performed on many occasions. I am also a member of a local thespian group and take part in both summer shows and pantomimes each year, this year I was appointed the principle role of the fairy. I have also been taking singing lessons for 2 years and I'm currently a grade 5.

I have been a volunteer at the local youth group entertaining a looking after a group of around 20 6-11 year olds. I have also taken part in a event called Ncounter, this is an event in which people involved complete different tasks to help the local residents, some of these tasks include: litter picking , fence painting, running a drop in session and completing gardening for some of the older residents.

could you please critique my personal statement, this is an application for the next college that I would like to move up to.

Is there any improvements to be made?

Thanks :)