please read and c/c my poem. how do you like it?

Its like a river is flowing out of me,

a river of tears,

Today i m down in the ground,

six feet under.

I need a cup of life, flavoured with smile,

cup without bottom,

Need to slide down from the cliff of despair,

to climb one more time.

I am thirsty and still riding towards a desert,

desert without U turn,

There is a mirror following me into this abyss,

abyss full of mirrors.

There is no way out of the dimension i am in,

a dimension, dimensionless,

Lost in, half full of void, half nill of fill ,

smoking on an underground hill.

Give me a pill of dreams wrapped around a gun,

a pill to swallow,

I wish for a wish that i could wish,

a wish lost long ago.

Sometimes when i look out, i wish it start to rain,

rain drops black and dry,

Why do i even try?,

try to breath, try to survive.