Is this a good way to start off my essay on my Physical Characteristic?

Can you tell me if I'm doing something wrong or incorrect ?

How would you grade me?

I would like to know if my thesis statement is good? (The last sentence)

Any advice?

Here it is my first paragraph:

A boy with no taste in fashion wears a sweater every day. He goes to the tennis courts to play with his friends in the warm sun in the spring. He hits every ball perfectly in to his friend’s side with a hard serve. As they return it with quick lightning he has fast reflexes to hit the ball back. With his glasses he can see the ball clear and perfect to strike right back to win the final points. I spend some time practicing tennis with my friends during the summer and spring. I don’t care what I wear besides if it’s clean or not, but not too noticeable. I wear glasses due to my bad vision. I am a carefree boy, who wears glasses, and enjoys being active.