Does this poem express emotion "Flames that Weep"?

The fires burned so bright and high back then;

flames dancing to a tempo in the heart.

I remember how it set off little sparks,

and sent them flying up upon the winds.

But as I shiver through this chilling season

I see the grey and ashen future's tone;

I stand beside the cooled dim hearth alone,

and wonder if there ever was a reason.

A tear rolls down from knowing eyes

that no longer gaze at stars above

and Love is smoke that drifts into the skies.

There is more beyond this mortal husk we borrow;

the flames will burn again fueled by sorrow.....

13 lines, how appropriate. Nice work my dear friend. Thanks for this moment of aching heart and nostalgia.

L11., `Never again to be warmed........`....?

L12., `I watch every dream.........`......?

This is a heart-breaking, or heart-broken write, Fredric.

Recently, I accidentally set light to a plastic bag

and was horrified that though I`d only a very

mild blister where the melted plastic

caught a finger as I quickly extinguished it -

I was eating a picnic on the nearby hill...

to see how flame can - well - run quickly

to every nearby inflammable (paper bag

and cardboard coffee-carton in that incident).

Your poem has about it a too - definite tone

(fire is, admittedly, definite) which in a sense

over-rides emotion so your poem would be emotionally enhanced by emotionally-charged imagery imo

(for whatever that`s worth and only that...)

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e.g. licks at my memory`s fading photographs,

warms, cools, is reduced from glow to ashes.

I say this as your last couplet has,

`slowly` ...so you might need some other

means for your reader to not read the last line

as contradicting the previous ones,

which seem to convey a singular event

rather than a hurting, on-going process..

This has me aghast...if that is an emotion

it is an emotional poem.

:) Be Blessed... Your work

always has a good quality of surprise - with depth. TY.

With "smoke" as your central metaphor,

you beautifully conveyed this theme

throughout, from beginning to end.

Your syllable flow is smooth as silk.

An example where all the disparate, poetic elements meld

and create an emotional experience.

An ideal ending couplet to an outstanding write, Fred.

This finds its way to my "Save List"

and will be periodically re-read.

Fredric

Very creative, and vintage Fredric poetic-ism,

with a good flow, imagery, and of course, in

answer to your question, it evokes emotion.

Most of yours do. Well done here.

Congrat

A true poem showing how life and love sometimes is.

Somewhat sad,but still conveys hope of another day.

Nicely stated.Format a little off,but I care less.

I enjoyed it...Thanks...byeeexxx

Just in review Fredric, nice, very nice.

It's really good, I like it but it could be more descriptive.

Keep writing :)

yes it does