please read and c/c my new poem? how do you like it?

If i could walk two more steps,

If i could look down that hill,

I'd be frozen in time, swallowed in peace,

If i could look away when you smiled.

Like an unspoken word, just stuck on lips,

like a water drop, frozen on the edge of a cloud ,

I was triggered, and i was fired towards the moon,

when from nowhere, stupid sun replaced the moon.

Going with the wind, but the wind took me back,

tried to be a bird,but got eaten by worms,

I swear i was alive, just don't remember when last time,

If i could write a song, i'd begin from the end.

If somebody listen to what i say,

there will be words unheard and melodies unsung,

I could colour up this world gray and white,

If i could walk two more steps, one to the left, one to the right.

It could have been a boulevard and hopes chirping around,

what now is a dead calm sea full of tears, and a black sun,

that shooting star could have fulfilled every wish,

If i could look down that hill, when i was about to jump.

Nothing would be here, but a dead heart flying,

beating or not, but glittering through the sky,

could have lit up this dark, just like that shooting star,

If i could look away when you smiled, at that shooting star.