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Tanaya asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 6 years ago

I just came up with this now. Do you think it's good opinions please.....?

my hell and heaven is what I descend in

People die people live

But I'll never get to heaven

My only sin is living life

But it gets to hard

To stay away from the sharp edges that glide across the night

Making it bleed until lightning strikes

My only hell is my only heaven

I never say goodbye

I dont ever sleep at night

Afraid of what might come and hide in plain sight

My only hope is my gun

That descends upon me until I run

The voices will never stop

Until I collapse to the ground and let my heart stop

My only heaven is my hell

That is what I shall awake in

My lip quivers

As I pull the trigger

The night starts to bleed again

Update:

If this offends your beliefs than well I'm sorry but than please don't bother answering than

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  • 6 years ago

    It's not good. Without punctuation, one could read whatever they want to in the words you have used. No one can make head ort ail of your statement. This is not the forum for texting. What you've written is nonsensical.

    Source(s): For example: When will lightning strike your only hell? Or when have you seen the night bleed?
  • 6 years ago

    Back to the drawing board..

  • 6 years ago

    I hope its good

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    6 years ago

    They have meds for that.

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  • 6 years ago

    um plz dont die ;(

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