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Another Autumn Poem?
So sunlight weakens, stirs our lawn
in partial shade embracing leaves,
like coracles afloat at sea.
These scattered craft of summer past
have fled a grieving cherry tree.
And on the ground, still wet with dew
a compass holds no earthly use,
they lie prostrate in patient wait
in hues of red, in random spread
uncertain of their pending fate.
Will they become an autumn mulch,
or feed the burner, turn to smoke,
send whispy trails high in the sky?
With all their glory days surpassed,
predestined too, like us they die.
2 Answers
- 6 years agoFavorite Answer
As always, your poems have depth, meaning, hints of some pathos and hope.I think my favorite two lines, early on are these,
"These scattered craft of summer past
have fled a grieving cherry tree."
If that isn't tangible imagery, I don't know what is. :) I would use a comma or semi-colon after "tree" however, and a lower case A, for "And"
A final observation, "too" I understand like us too they will die, As written, "to" would also work. <3