What do you think of my poem?

It needs work, but I'm more curious to understand whether or not it's verypersonal

In my opinion, if personal, it need not be expressed poetically as a cry for help, but something a professional should deal with.

Beyond that...

L 1, "being" gnawed at might be more realistic.

L 2, "or a hope" you really don't need this.

L 5, "The life I have is dead" I'd move "dying up, replacing "dead" and, drop "at any rate"

L 6, then is "And it's not" BUT, I'd replace "And" with "But"

Whatever line this becomes, "I have only tried" You don't need "only"

If Bias is the title, it should be at the top.

Cliche is usual, fo thousands of poems. Used wisely it can be effective.

I do agree re: generalizations vS. Specifics, such as "Why the poem, it's cause, impetus, any suggested solutions tried,,,failures or not.

If in fact it's a cry for help or as drastic as alluding to suicide, Number one, those contemplating it do not express so poetically, if at all, generally leaving grieving and unanswered questions. Suicide is a permanent solution, for what very well may be a temporary issue, OR one than can be worked through with help.

IF a note is left, it's often done so in throwing a final, pity party, with no decorations.

Cliches, generalities, abstractions. Yawn. How about some specifics, a specific story of how a specific act of "bias" affected a specific individual, told with lots of sensory details and less abstract preaching?

"What do you think of my poem?" Is actually a specific example of a chat violation in the rules here.

And I don't like it.

It s good when we are struggling to remember it s frustrating

when nothing is recorded in your brain you feel hopeless almost like some part of you is dying like you say in your poem ..

Great stuff ... Keep writing please :)

It's nice to see people at least trying,so it's fair.

You should never volunteer to answer calls for a suicide prevention hot-line.

Nancy?

Never give up

Eh I don't get much from it. What is it about?

good, shows unhappy and tense feelings