Rate my poem pls., i wanna know what you guys think?
Here i am on my bed,
as tears my face shed,
for i am lonely,
and i yearn to be happy,
and in my heart a space i carry,
for the one that i will fancy.
It is my will,
even till' that universal hourglass refills,
to look for the one,
that i will want,
for the one i will yearn,
maybe then she will learn,
i love her,
and will always be my lover.
Guys/ Girls, please tell me what you think. Constructive criticism welcomed, just throw everything at me.