So, what do you all think of my poem?

Firstly, I never write anything really much less poetry but I was in a very contemplative mood and I just needed to write down my thoughts and that soon turned into the below poem.

I'd like your honest opinions on it, if you thinks its bad say its bad or vice versa. cheers



So here I sit looking around
Just a man searching for answers out loud
Too many questions asked too many times
Pondering forever, If the bell still chimes?

So here I sit, thinking Who? What? and Why?
If I could make all this real to transcend all this joy
For all that is happening is happening in me
To translate into language would arrive such glee

So here I sit, left alone with them all
feelings abound, preempting a fall
To envisage myself as my own saboteur
To have trodden this path, just to say what for?

Normad2010-10-13T21:33:50Z

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In my opinion, you are good at it, if this is your first attempt.
It is easy to recite and the meaning is evident.
Continue writing.

?2010-10-14T03:48:52Z

Seems like you really want it to have meaning. Not enough is left to the reader, but good job overall.