Give a read. Please. Constructive critique is welcome XD?
Oh, those deep dark pits,
round and black, they entice,
a glance into them and i fall to bits,
telling a story of danger and dangerous vice.
Blink away, blink away,
there, my soul does not wisho to stay,
look astray, look astray,
keeping bitterness, sadness and pain at bay....
Inflictor, remembrancer are the dark dark brown orbs,
pulled into them in times past,
then quickly, painfully, fast....
thrown back out just like times past.
I loved, and seduced by them is true fact,
not looking, even a glance...fruitless act,
you still bring it all back,
and as if it were wonderful,
you bring them back by the sackful.
It hurts, it hurts, to thinkof them,
you have done much healing, but more pain,
sometimes, it feels like a crippling poison,
those are the times, i try to keep myself sane...
A poem written during the depths of sadness that come and go....
Anyway, give it a read. I know it's not all that great, but emotion is a hard thing to phase. Espacially when you want it to sound nice...Critique please...