What do you think about this poem?

My Sunshine

Like a flower without water
Gandhi without food
Somehow I am less alive
When I am without you

You’re the source of all my energy
The thought behind my smile
The feeling I never thought I’d have
And have been for a while


If you ever took your love away
I don’t know what I’d do
I don’t want to live without you

2011-06-13T11:56:48Z

pink: Thank you. I almost cut that part because I thought people wouldn't get it. Glad to see I was wrong.

Rachel: Thanks. If I was worried about someone stealing it I wouldn't post it here- good point though.

tj8: When Gandhi refused to eat it was a powerful act of love that caused him to suffer. This poem recognizes the break in spiritual energy that happens when there is major discord in a deep and meaningful relationship. I'll admit it's a stretch, which is why I considered taking it out, but creative liberties prevailed. I'm sorry if it offended you.

2011-06-13T11:59:42Z

Teddy: Love is a drug my friend. If you get cut off, withdrawals are inevitable.

2011-06-13T12:35:06Z

Looking for more: Thanks. Maybe you should write something like that. My guess would be that there's not as much emotion in strategy so it's more difficult to write about it. Just a thought.

2011-06-13T13:09:28Z

Kayla: Thanks. :)

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Sounds like an addiction. is it drugs perhaps makes you say those things?

tj82011-06-13T18:32:10Z

Gandhi without food ?

Are you referring to Mr. MK Gandhi, the father of the nation of India?
It is right here:

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Gandhi

I can not comment for Sonia Gandhi, or other Gandhis in existence.

>>"Like a flower without water
>>Gandhi without food"

Why don't you rephrase,

"Like a flower with no fragrance
Gandhi with no followers"

You got the idea, right ?

>>"Somehow I am less alive
>>When I am without you"

If that is about your love, forget those
suggestions, you can't bring in holy
men to just to exaggerate your earthly
sentiments.

THX

Anonymous2011-06-13T19:22:05Z

Love is a drug indeed!

I like it...a lot.

I understand why people write about a love lost or being taken away but no one ever writes about what drove it away or how they intend to make it stay....

Anonymous2011-06-13T18:17:00Z

i love it<3
i like the Gandhi without food part(:

Anonymous2011-06-13T18:17:13Z

omg it's so beautifulllllllll!!!!!!!!! lol i bet yah people are gonna steal it from yah!!! :O yeah but its really nice <3 well done.. if you made it ?

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