Does my poem make sense?

Who cares? When you write poetry, it is a pure expression of yourself. You are the only one who is supposed to know what sense it makes. The reader is suppossed to make their own meanings out of your words. Just like music...grammar and sense are thrown out. I do think it is beautiful.

Incidentally though, if you are intending to be a poet, be forewarned it is like being an artist: you aren't famous, and your work isn't priceless, 'till your dead. That is another sad reality....

how fast or slow life changes

can be sometime be predicted by

how fast our fates change and that

is some how in our own hands

most of the time, but not always

there are outside circumstances

and situtions and influences

and things that we don't know

or ever understand that intervene

how fast our own heart changes

is a matter of our own choice

most of the time, unless we are in

extreme emotional positions

sometimes beyond our own control

how fast a life is concieved

is a matter of few seconds

sometimes and sometimes

it never happens for some

people at all even if they want it

and that is the way it is meant

to be if they like that or not

how fast a life is taken

is a matter of split seconds

depends sometimes people

die slow grueling death

and the medical industry

keeps them from getting

on with it and it destroys them

how fast our childhood passes

is a matter of how we age

no this is not always true,

how we age can be influenced

by our childhoods though

how fast happy times pass

is a matter of how we preserve them

yeah I think this is true

how fast sadness passes

is how we deal with it

not just that though

there are other variables too

how fast you fall in love

is a matter of who you love

no it is a matter of who you are

not who you love

how fast your learn to hate

is a matter of who teaches you hatered

yeah to a large extent

how fast your wounds heal

is how u you take the pain

partially and what you do to

make things right again

how fast your scars fade

is a matter of how fast you forget them

Yes and no, one must forget and yet

remember too for the lesson that they can

use to help themselves and others with, but

not to dwell on it in a negative way and

not to make it the most important thing

how fast you absorbe these words of mine

is a matter of how fast u accept reality.

what is reality to you? nothing on this net

is ever really real is it, can't and don't

people play games on here all the time?

The concept is good. There are some very cool lines in there, but if I were you I would go at it with a chain saw and see how much better it CAN be.

The lines about how fast a life is conceived and the split seconds it takes to be taken floors me! Excellent!

Very nicely done. You may want to consider submitting it to a legitimate forum like Poetic Diversity: http://www.poeticdiversity.org/ for consideration of publication. Good Luck!

Agree with Tunesmith

If by "Does my poem make sense?" you mean "Do my poem's messages make sense?", then yes. If you mean "Does my poem make sense grammatically?", then it could be better.

Just a bit of criticism; try going over each line to make sure each sentence flows and doesn't sound too awkward.

Good luck!

it would make more sense if you spelt properly

awww... that's cute

good stuff

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