Opinions on my piece I wrote for an acting class?

Whats the point? What are you trying to say?

Do not treat your audience like idiots but do not treat them like they are mind readers.

You said allot and conveyed nothing.

Try writing one sentence In a piece of paper that says what your trying to say. Then show your writing to someone if they cant even come close to understanding that one sentence then you have not been very successfully.

Wither or not i like your piece or not is not relevant. Its just as of now quite unsuccessfull.

Very good. I like mysterious quality of this piece. It reveals a small clue about the difficulties between mother and daughter. It makes me want to read more. It is well written.

I'm guessing screenplay, poet, novelist in your future? Right!

I've written over 20 plays (not that it necessarily means my answer is any better than any other), but I think it's excellent. I wouldn't tell you how to improve it except that I think the ending would be more interesting if we got to see the mother's action and reaction after she hears her daugher's final words.

Who is saying what? confused. Is the girl running alone or with the other girl? How is the mother standing with her while running?

Other than that I did get a good visual. antagonist is clear. just don't know who is who.

Very artistic and good. A reaction from the mother would finish it nicely.

Sounds good.... just a little confused on the actions of the characters. It wasn't really clear to me. Other than that it was very good.

I think its great, very artistic. The way you described it i felt like i was there watching. keep up the good work. Jes

just a little confusing but not bad deary

its classic