my poem , i love your opinions?

So old I must have now become,

My memory plays a trick.

I thought I answered this cute poem,

My mind I think, is sick.

So once again I'll read this poem,

And once again, I'll write.

And tell you just how good it is,

You'll know then, it's all right.

Please write some more for me to read,

And I will answer twice.

I don't mind the work, you see,

For you write really nice.

My first opinion is that what you have written isn't a poem.

That said, however, I must add that I am no longer certain what it is that makes one piece of literature a poem and another not. Merely breaking up the composition into short

lines with initial capitals does not differentiate it from prose,

though that is the only detectible difference between prose

and what some people call poetry. Meter and rhyme are not

consistently part of a poem, either. Switching to another

language, what about haiku? Try reading E.A. Poe's

discussion of poetry, especially his treatment of Longfellow's

Evangeline.

uuhhhh...

its OK. but...

it sort of sounds wanabee-poetish know what i mean? It needs to be a little more organized and try to keep like on the same topic, to be inspired by something, not 2 write just for the sake of writing. Besides that 2 and a half stars. It has potential but need a little more work...have u ever heard of creative communactions?? Try submitting ur best work there 2 see what happens...good luck!

top half good seems that as you moved on you lost your flow still good but not up to your standards are you rushing just to put stuff out if so please don't it will always show