Do you like this poem? The form is Dorsimbra...?

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Time 

Upon my watch, three hands tell me the time,
The mirror shows a different degree,
Forgotten thoughts with words that do not rhyme,
Meander down the road to lunacy.

Shine your shoes up!
Put on your tie!
Let’s go outside…
And find a place to fly!

Come and gone for me to see, believed,
The ocean tides, rivers wide, crimson sky,
How will I know when God has called to me?
Upon my watch, three hands tell me the time.

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Anonymous · Accepted Answer

New one on me!
Dorsimbra?
My spell check.
My dictionary.
My Thesaurus.
Don't have it.
The Y/A spell check flags it as a misspelling.
Clue me in buddy.

Fr. Al · Answer

Your artistry outdoes me, even when you stretch a bit in places.  Keep it up and keep posting.  How about some new challenges? a couple of us haven't tried Dorsimbras yet.
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Marguerite · Answer

Yes, I like it.  And you've inspired me.  I shall attempt my first Dorsimbra.  But, I am getting confused with the syllable count.  I will have to study it further.  Or am I getting hung up on the wrong emphasis?

Sptfyr · Answer

I like it very much.  The flow of the poem with it's long stanza, quick stanza, and the long again creates a very interesting  and rhythm.  I especially like  the way it ends as it begins.  It gives the poem a definite sense of closure. The poem itself very good too.   Is this the same form as Destinations?

piglet :) · Answer

huwaw. i LOVE it.

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Do you like this poem? The form is Dorsimbra...?

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