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Keep the Candle Burning - any thoughts or ideas please?
KEEP THE CANDLE BURNING
Life is like a Candle; it burns brightly.
The experiences we have are like the wax dripping.
Sometimes our candle feels almost snuffed out,
But it is not until the candle burns right down that it truly expires.
We must learn how to rekindle the flame and protect it from some of life’s elements;
To keep it in a place that it will illuminate, give warmth and last as long as possible.
By doing so we can learn to burn more brightly
And fill our life with light where once there were shadows.
Wendy Brown
February 2008
First decision - paste the finished poem - it has been amended slighly - I have another for you as well. Blessings.
Graham, ever full of good advice - thank you - how are you?
4 Answers
- strawberrysocksLv 41 decade agoFavorite Answer
I would change the similie to a metaphor->Life is a candle. It is more effective and powerful that way.
Also, instead of "the experiences we have" i would say "our experiences". Shorter and more to the point. Every word should count.
Just a few comments, dont wan't to influence it too much.
Source(s): I write. - 1 decade ago
I can't thank you enough for sharing this poem with me. As you can see, it's been on my profile for some time :)
- Anonymous1 decade ago
I hope so,I said to the ho,LOL!