I've been working on this for quite awhile....what do you think?

You speak for many who miraculously survive a less than perfect childhood and who eventually find what they are looking for in the ordinary things others take for granted.

Your sister must be a very special person.

This is poetry.

This is good. My compliments. I liked the "peacock feathers forever engrained" I highlighted a few words I do not think you need or should change. Overall though, this is really good.

Sister

By Jonni F.

We both began,

in the home that wasn't.

I was your child,

you were my god.

I shared your adventures

with (my) six year old eyes.

You left to find

a home that was,

and I

was all alone.

Values you gave me,

peacock feathers(,) forever engrained.

Books and museums,

new people, new places,

and learning what home could be.

A lifetime later,

we share our adventures,

our triumphs,

our sorrows,

shared like those peacock feathers, (of) long ago.

We have finally found it.

We are home.

Thank you for sharing your poem....some poems are written and appeal to others based upon their wit, rhythm and rhyme...these are the ones I really like. Other poems are based upon the writers personal experience and exhibit the pain the writer felt in varying degrees...most time lacking a bit of rhythm and rhyme but high on emotion.

...the only problem I have with these types of poems is that the author rarely tells a complete and specific meaning the poem...so not only do you not have a full knowledge as to what going on you also dont have any closure....It is the same way I feel with this poem. However with what little I can understand and assume...it is nice.

Sweetness, I don't have to know the details or understand all the specifics to know what I just read is a wonderful retelling of your life where the circle was once broken and now, years later, it was completed again, and from that reconnecting, you now feel complete.

You got that across beautifully, the rest can remain private to you and be imagined by us.

Hugs, ma

Yes, Jonni, you have written a poem. Congratulations on your progress. Send me an email, You may be taking a long voyage next year.

Well done. Not much to add to what others said, except this is by far the best piece I have seen from you! Very well done, indeed.

Your sister is very lucky to have you and you she. I like this snapshot of Jonni F

I do like your poem. A schedule of tranquil passage.

talking about reaching heaven? :)