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... asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 1 decade ago

do you like my poems?

so im trying to start writing

ive written stuff before but i dont normally like what i write...so i need opinions...and yes i know there are silly little love poems...oh and i also dont have names so any suggestions???

Poem one:

its all so confusing to know just how to feel

im lost in so many emotions ive forgotten witch ones are real.

im left here standing not knowing what to do.

ive become a home to confusion,

and im left without a clue.

my heart and mind are in a battel,

and i know not who will win.

ive come so far i cant face being broken again

you say that wont happen,

and nothing will change.

but i cant help but wonder

if all guys are really are the same

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Poem 2:

have you known how hard ive fallen,

have i dropped enough clues.

do you know that every passing day

the only thing i think of is you.

i dont want it to be like this,

i wish i hadnt gone head over heels.

is this it?

is this how?

true love really feels.

but your not mine,and im not yours.

its a sad fact,that i wish wasnt true.

all i want is to be in you arms.

all i want is to be with you..

so what ya think im not finished really but im getting stuck..

and help would be appreciated

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    Use a spell checker. I'd rather see the lines set in a stanza, it makes it easier to read.

    Titles:

    1- Love's Challenges

    2-Is it Real?

    This line: all i want is to be in you arms.

    needs to be your instead of you.

    Good work. Keep writing! t

    If you don't mind, check out my open questions -- all poetry, different genres

  • ?
    Lv 6
    1 decade ago

    I would say you are on a good start for a beginner.

    I'm impressed with your rhyming

    But you could improve it for reading by less spacing between lines.

    Also check spelling and for things a reader might stumble over.

    Fare ye well, Jessikah

    Just keep on writing.

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Yes.

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    great job on both sorry I only read poems I am no good at writing

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