A poem I wrote awhile back, what do you think?

Whimsical, interesting, interesting pattern, too. A fun read.

I'm not sure I understand it, but that's okay. I'm still trying to figure out the Fellini movie "La Dolce Vita," and that's been about a half century.

good ideas and fairly good use of literary excitement and vocabulary institution. However your flow is a bit broken. This may be due to rhyme scheme or meter. I will rewrite this for an example, yes? Ex:

I have this friend; I like him yes

for he makes me think outside the box

Yet he annoys me for this I do confess

And I'm too old to play with blocks

that which would drive me quite insane

for thus this box is of ticking clocks.

I do realize you were trying to keep the scheme... I didnt like it! hahaha sorry bout that. But you do however recognize the first verse. See with this substitution and manipulation of syllable integrity, we can create a more fluid poem. Oorah?

Merci Madamoiselle, it seems you have been influenced by the french, and the use of an acopee in ("o'er"), the grammar structure seems to me of european nature, which adds to the sense of a little odd in English, which I liked the tone was fun. Nice write.

Wow... I never really liked the literary device of repetition... But yours made me think twice... Very nice, the repeated lines fits in perfectly... I like this line 'A better choice would be a pet'... That is so cute...

It reads beautifully.

His annoyance you do not fear

it's more like something you like, dear

It's very nice to see your face; put a face to the beautiful words you write. Me thinks you were born to look like a brilliant poet! :)

I'm having a hard time figuring out what it means, maybe I'm too tired. But I like it - like how it sounds. I like "I'm too old to play with blocks." Reminds me of pointless arguments with my wonderful boyfriend. :-)

Nice. It illustrates the complexities and uncertainty of emotions. Well written.

It is good to think out of the box.

i love it...still waiting 4 u to see my diamonte

I think I like it. I like this style.