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My Heavy Duty Love Poetry. Comments?
COME, TAKE.
Come, take my hand
Let us walk in unison upon the bridge
that spans our rivers of hesitation.
Amidst that courage we shall breathe freely
and sculpt our love's redoubt.
Come, take my heart
Entwine it with your golden ring of Emotions.
You've captured me, enraptured me.
Touch the fire of your Sun's bestowment.
For all that you give me
I redeem in you
infinitely.
Come, take my soul
Rend from me the false facades of fear.
Invest within me of your virtuous Truth.
Our beings, fused as one
shall rewrite mankind's love
as heaven and earth meet
in the Union that is Us.
Come, take me
And join in my sonnet of celestial bliss.
Together to dance in rejoiceful harmony
of life
of love
of We.
9 Answers
- 1 decade agoFavorite Answer
Very Nice read as well as write,
makes me want to be the gal...
Never thought of myself as sentimental, but I guess I am after all.
hold onto the pen that wrote this, use it again and again.
- 1 decade ago
Interesting how you chose to highlight the words Emotion, Sun, Truth, Union, We....
You used a bit of internal rhyme, alliteration even a hint of assonance.
And it's not 'over-the-counter' Hallmark.
Good.
- ?Lv 45 years ago
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- Anonymous1 decade ago
like it.............good verse
