Are you in the mood to critique my poem?

You do like your acrostics. The word 'evacuate' did not seem the best choice although you are somewhat limited by the acrostic. Maybe 'extinguish' or 'egest' or 'eliminate'? Also the word 'allegiance'? Maybe try 'accelerating' our downfall? Overall though, the message is strong.

duhhh :P

hmm...veryyyy interesing, I was wondering tho, should ritualistic be capital because it feels like a continuation of the line before it? Other than that point I think this is very thought-provoking, when i finished reading it I thought it was about how propaganda sorta brain-washes ppl then I read your title it gave the piece a whole new twist which I loved about it! I actually really like how it ended, it wasn't exactly abrupt but I guess the write generaly speaking went pretty quickly which would make it feel abrupt, especially when you wanna just sink into each word

brilliant write! :D

Ain't done yet. I love it, but it stops like a hitchcock movie, just short of the end. What's at the bottom of the abyss? Is there a way out?

Very good my friend, you have described the Political Leaders of America at this time. They are leading US into captivity just as the Leadership of Judah did after the death of King Josiah, the last righteous King of Judah. The Nation Elected them, and the Nation will suffer for it.

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you will find rats and mice digging under the foundations of a large beautiful mansion just to tear it down, or to force its people to live in misery or leave . those rats & mice don't realize that a wrecked mansion makes an open invitation for their arch enemies: owls and snakes.

good acrostic, semper!

Only critique I have is line 5 - should that be who's or whose? I get it mixed up.

Otherwise - awesome poem acrostically speaking haha.

And honestly content-wise a sad truth.

Friends...

supposed to share

during our downfall are devoted to care

yet this is a mad mood world , my friend be aware

friends would be happy to give you a hand and always be there

other !....... when you need a hand thy wish to barry you where you stand

Are we all doomed at the hands of the Democrats? Sounds like it to me. That is what i got out of this poem. Good write.

That was really good. I could understand the point, yet it was not Plainy written. Great word choice.