What do you want them to want?

The use of the simile of a "green dagger" is so unwittingly sinister, it appealed to my evil side ... the menace of this poem was brilliant

"but you give them only vague bitterness

and a bit of poetry when you can afford

to drain your insides

without caving your own head in."

This makes a statement I've been wanting to SCREAM for a while now.

EDIT: And I think of writers block as the brain and soul's inability to drain. When I feel too much I can't let it go. So I think I need to take a break from writing. Heh.

A whisper to some is an unbidden scream trying to find voice in another

nice..

my whispers ragged

on the last breath I gagged

and my tiny sinister tail I wagged

then water to my lips you brought

gave me pause to wonder..*thought*

and loudly now I say well done

to the tale you've aptly spun

I heard Bukowski in this.

I hear frustration and weariness of living up to other's expectations.

I hear pain and a desire to just be.

I hear the sad song of a poet.

ma

Every line, every word but especially...

"Dripping with ambiguous expression

and dark shades over your face

you hide "

I have, however, earned my wounds (in life).

This is one of my favorites. *Applauds*

For some reason these words remind me of people that want the right answers to their problems but won't listen to reason.

This is great, the struggle of being true to self, in spite of others.

Really a great write, Bravo

I love the way Alobar and ma said it. Would be great to hear you read this one... I'm just sayin'.

These lines nailed it, the fragility of great egos, of simple humanity:

but you only whisper,

you can only barely

whisper.