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Cathy G asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 1 decade ago

Feedback/opinions on a short poem?

My LA teacher gave us a "creative writing assignment," and I wrote a poem. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated!

I saw the world through rose-colored glasses.

Everything was soft and pink.

No harsh lines. No jarring colors.

I saw the world through rose-colored glasses.

I took off the glasses for a short while.

The lines were sharp and jagged.

The colors were too vivid.

I put the glasses back on.

Someone took my glasses

And jumped on them ‘til they cracked.

The pieces lay scattered on the ground.

I stared and cried.

I see the world without my glasses.

I don’t cry anymore.

Update:

3rd stanza: changed "pieces" to "shards"

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago
    Favorite Answer

    its good it comes from a different point and i love how scared you were of the world without your blanket of comfort and then got to know the real world and survived

  • ?
    Lv 4
    5 years ago

    wow! its staggering, remarkable and encouraging.. to stand reality it is something all persons can relate to.. that poem is unique from each and all the poem's i examine. according to hazard if it became revealed people might open their eyes and face reality merely like what you stated. u might even make a distinction!

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