How do you like my poems? I'm only 13. Tell me which one you like best.?

I've wrote a few poems, and I posted them on FictionPress but no one really gave any feedback. Tell me how you like them. Tell the truth: constructive critisism is really appreciated!!

Here I Stay: (screwed up rhyming scheme)

sorrow and grief

no relief

they threaten to run down

my ugly face

retched tears

silly fears

catch my breath, hope to death

that I won’t go down tonight

black on black

quiet attack

darkness surrounding

me

no escape

from the façade

that binds me here

today

heavy burdens

on my heart

such a fragile thing

from the start

reach out

cry out

touch nothing

silent cries

creep through slowly

slowly devouring

as I’m cowering

away from myself

eat my way

through the day

maybe I’ll make it

until then here I stay

Premonition:

No fear of what’s behind,

only what’s to come.

The fear of my impending doom,

scarce hope, only some.

My premonition of what will take me soon,

leaves me breathless, shaken.

Flickering and faltering images of my past,

the punishment in the making.

That dark ‘something’ is catching up,

repercussions of my past.

Soon my actions will obliterate me

only my shadows left to cast.

Dark shadows devouring the light,

lurking, haunting.

Reflections of myself and what I have done,

laughing, taunting.

I look into the mirror one last time

and see what I’ve become.

Dark eyes taken over with hate,

but there’s still more to come.

So now I sit alone and cry.

My tears pour over and I moan.

Consequences of my actions

left me so alone.

Forever I Will:

I see you all around me

but my mind knows your not there

only a figment of my imagination

a beautiful one

I see glimpses of you

an illusion of my past

trying to break me down

it’s working

I feel you all around me

just out of my grasp

can’t touch you, I reach out

and find nothing

I feel your presence

seek you out only

to find empty air

I’m alone

I hear you all around me

your voice sounds like an angel’s

whispering words that I want to hear

words you will never speak.

I hear you close to me

breathing low and quiet

whispering more

lovely words.

I see you

I feel you

I hear you

I love you

Forever

Theif:

Poison snaking through my veins

Adds onto the pain.

More

Sneaky and sly

Your tricky little games

Broken hearts galore.

Pushing through the wall

Try to get past my barricade

Success.

Crashing down, then I fall

Broken heart and façade

Down I go

Forever falling in misery

Never peaceful, no relief

Forever

You- forever ingrained in my memory

Brings only hurt and grief

Save me

My heart, stolen

Forever you will keep it.

Theif

Swollen:

Everyone’s clueless

about what’s going on

in that tiny little house

during the crack of dawn.

Beatings and torture,

bleeding and screaming.

The poor child thinks

life has no meaning.

Cowering away

from the person inflicting

this pain on him

with punching and kicking.

The dad had a hangover

while the mom is on crack.

The child is terribly skinny

from the food he lacks.

He screams for mercy

but the beating continues.

He’s loosing his life,

and all that he values.

He never deserved this

and it still goes unexplained

as the parents abuse him

completely unrestrained.

Twenty seven bruises

scattered across him.

A slice on his forehead

and ten on his limb.

He cries when their gone

his head barely maintained,

and grieves over all that

they have detained.

His head itches

from the lice he’s obtained.

But the beatings gradually worsen

the more he complains.

Only ten years old

with his virginity stolen.

Now he lays on the floor

bleeding and swollen.

As you can see, most of them are angst poetry. Mostly what I'm feeling right now (being a teenager and all). Tell me what you truthfully think about them.