"Money" - How do you feel during the recession?

Talawah, I have always admired your mind and how it works. This poem is awesome. I love the analogy you make comparing the love of money to the love of a woman and the betrayal of trust we are all feeling right now in this economy to a lover's betrayal. Very clever, deep and well written.

Bravo !!!

First, thanks for your answer to my question. I'll definitely take your advice into consideration when i rewrite my poem (:

And to answer yours...

Well. It is sort of confusing, I think. The way you wrote it, it's hard to tell whether you're writing a poem about money, like a financial crisis, or whether you're writing about someone you love and you are using money to symbolize that.

But overall I think it was very interesting, a well written poem.

A few minor changes should be made, but that applies to all poems, I think.

Anyway, clarify the whole money/lover thing and it would be a wonderful poem.

Oh, and I love the way you said 'Midas touch'

I don't know why, but I love it when people refer to Greek mythology.

(:

Wow. Amazing poem, seriously. Love how you made the attachment that money-hungry folk have with money out to seem like a romantic relationship. I enjoyed reading it too and I agree with the first answerer, you need to publish this, before someone else might steal it and claim it's theirs.

I don't think it's confusing at all. I don't really have any complaints or critiques. :)

very powerful metaphor.

I like that you compare the power of money to that of a sex goddess. You describe the intoxication of the love of money and the hold it can have over a man well.

My fave piece:

I asked her to recommend any friends of her calibre,

She texted and recommended me some of em’:

Power and Respect, she said.

But I knew they weren’t the sex, like money was,

lol. yes, you killed that.

You got skills. This is very deep. Love it. Especially considering how many today worship at the altar to the Almighty Dollar. It shows how its not worth it.

What a beautiful and truthful poem you are so talented and you need to be recognize for your work and should really go after trying to get published and bring it back the after of the spoken word is so beautiful and so under appreciated..........

hey talawah i use 2 accounts now bruh. am on level 2 on the other one so i hardly use this one. like i said previously though. DOPE POEM.

cristina was hatteninnnnnnnnn see ya grill looking scrumptuos lol

totally feeling the poem

love the intertwined plot

this NEEDS, BEGS, to be published. I had such a good time reading this. Thanks. You are very gifted.