These are two poems out of four...feedback please? (I'll put the other one in the next question)?

{][} Red Rain {][}

*I wrote this one a few months ago*

Blood flows in my veins no longer,

I have nothing to make me stronger.

I am screaming so hurt and weak,

Bleeding as death kisses my cheek.

Where is the man, who swore,

He’d save me any way he can?

Am I to be left like this?

Without one last bloody kiss?

Pain is the only feeling I have,

Pain that which you gave.

My heart once sang songs of joy,

Now I realize I am just a toy.

I sit outside and cry,

Wish death would make me die.

Take my life,

Kill his wife.

I swing in the rain,

As I bleed from my pain.

My tears fall,

At deaths call.

Where is he, who loved me,

Who made death see?

That my bloody rain,

Is because of his pain.

I know where he is,

He left me alone like this.

Alone in this never ending hell,

Waiting to hear deaths final bell.

As I wait in my red rain,

I start to go insane.

How could he,

Just leave me?

I must forget,

My destiny is set.

Death is calling,

While I am balling.

The one meant to save me,

Has just left me be.

Now it is time,

I pay for my crime.

Time to breathe my last,

And forget the past.

Death has come to be rid my soul,

Stopping this rain in my last goal.

Let death kiss my heart,

Pull me apart.

Stop the blood,

Stop the rain,

But most of all,

Stop my pain.

♥Hold Me Tight♥

All the love that I feel rushes entrenched inside me,

With you I can be who I want to be.

The way that you wrap your arms around me so very tight,

No matter if I struggle...I never feel extensive need to fight.

I love you so much more than words can say,

That love increases every single day.

When you bow down to kiss my head,

I can’t help but think of the book that I read.

The one you know...

Where they were together forever and had the perfect life.

Where her love for him extensively grew,

And eventually she became his wife.

They both lived happily beyond the end,

I want this so badly with you...and I promise I will not pretend.

You alone make me feel vibrant and REAL,

I want so badly to tell everyone how I really feel.

I very terribly need to tell them how it is going to be,

Tell them of the immense love between you and me.

You create a need within me to shout it out,

To tell the whole wide world what our love's about!

Actually I just want you to know,

I will ALWAYS allow my love for you show!

Even if we… we get extremely crazy,

At times I might be incredibly mazy.

All I have to do is say three words and make things right,

Simply so you can stay and hold me tight!

ᘓPink Cloudsᘒ

*I wrote this poem today*

Every day I wonder if your love is real,

I feel like I am spinning on some torture wheel.

Days go by,

And tears are cried.

If he truly loves me,

Why can’t he see?

His words give me pain,

They’re driving me insane!

I think about the time that’s past,

And ask myself how long I’ll last.

I am not longer strong,

The way you treat me is very wrong.

If I continue to bleed,

Then you will never plant your seed.

Our children…our future,

All ruined by this torture!

Then I remembered…those words you said,

Now I can’t get them out of my head.

Baby if ever you miss me,

Look up at the sky and maybe...

You’ll smile and realize,

Our love excels past the skies.