Writing poetry about the people I meet. Comments?

The rhythm is good. I don't respond well to rhymes but it's alright. Jauntily is out of place here. I'd say as a whole, the poem is okay. One piece of advice though, there's a definite difference between being in awe of beauty and plain old objectifying. You're skating in the middle. Be aware.

Hi fine writing i am so completely happy, that my favourite tale teller is again. On this discussion board you ought to placed to your two layer's of tuff epidermis, if no longer you'll lose your glow, and that i refused to take delivery of this. Don't allow the loser get to your nerves. LOL. Your piece flows with phrases, feelings, pix and emotions , very dramatic aspect of being a human; "Lottie" watched as mum fainted. Worse regardless that, informative talks. A courting tainted These verses got here to my concentration i ponder whether it is what i 'm brooding about approximately?? Keep on writing God bless!

Thats amazing. Keep going!!! You are really good. I wish you the best of luck!

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that is an AWESOME rhyme scheme and pattern. Sounds Great!!

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Nice one. Has she seen it yet ?