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Loaded Gun
Quieted
always quieted
my words
ricochet
off the back walls
of thought
like silver bullets
piercing into
the chaos
wounding
self expression
and killing the art
with a silent tongue
quieted
always quieted
fearful
that those
watchful will criticize
what another
heart desires
gnawing
I feel it gnawing
at the back of
my throat
like a dry cough
it clutches
and remains
stuck in the barrel
indecisive
finger on the trigger
of hope
quieted
always quieted...
Temari
To all that answered much love!
... I am that "loaded gun" ...
20 Answers
- ?Lv 71 decade agoFavorite Answer
I think it beautifully expresses that feeling the poet has when sharing their work with another. The work is a piece of you from deep within, & sometimes fear can quiet that voice that wants to express what the heart so deeply knows & feels, but it feels sometimes like you have laid your soul out for all to see. It is a very vulnerable & exposed feeling!
Well done!
Blessings!
- ErinLv 41 decade ago
Quieted
always
quieted
my words ricochet off the back walls of thought
like silver bullets piercing into the chaos wounding self expression and killing the art with a silent tongue
quieted
always
quieted
fearful that those watchful will criticize what another heart desires
gnawing
I feel it
gnawing
at the back of my throat like a dry cough it clutches and remains
stuck in the barrel
indecisive
finger on the trigger
quieted
always quieted...
i dont know why your own words are wounding your abillity to express yourself. that doesnt make sense.
- 1 decade ago
Hi. It sounds like the devil contemplating his eventual destruction.
His finger on the trigger of hope
quieted always quieted.
my words
ricochet
off the back walls
of thought
those
watchful will criticize
what another
heart desires
Quieted
always quieted.
- 1 decade ago
It is clear that you know the answer to Erin's question. The entire poem is an answer to Erin's question, but I think she understands without wanting to understand. We all know some things about ourselves that are dangerous to say aloud. Truth unspoken can be denied, but once it is out there it has power beyond our control.
Another thing Erin does supports this. Her re-arrangement actually creates a greater clarity than the original. But that's not what you wanted. The original form presents more room for interpretation. Your form helps hide the truth in plain sight. And, of course, your way heightens the emotional intensity - there's more anxiety, even fear with the original. But kudos to her. She helped me to understand your work much better.
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- Anonymous1 decade ago
The words
The words they seem to run
Run between shadows
of flickering
of dancing
of sparkling light
wrapped in blankets
of darkness
Never knowing
the touch
Never seeing
the world
reaching
always reaching
for the unreachable
only feel-able
And the silence
screaming symbols
says...
I
Like
Your
Words
MP
Source(s): (((Hugs))) - Anonymous1 decade ago
I love it. I can feel the finger on the trigger. The character is crushed under the weight of soft thoughts and burning desires.
- duggsLv 44 years ago
My cat's call is Joan. once I moved into my abode the carport storage door replaced into open. I closed it. numerous days later i spotted a scent. I opened the door and there have been 5 lifeless kittens interior. once I rotated there replaced right into a black cat at my ft. I promised that if she had yet another muddle i could safeguard them. She had yet another muddle. All yet one walked off into the wooded area (next to my abode), all excep one that stayed. She remains with me right this moment. She is now +/- 22 years previous in human words. purely a passing concept
- Anonymous1 decade ago
pull the trigger...repeatedly
the sayers sat silent
wounded by their wrong
unaware, that
in the slaughter
they had created
their downfall
- 1 decade ago
the single word "trigger" and about being so much ready to end the "quietness".... wonderful :)
amir
- SilvaLv 61 decade ago
Watch out for those ricocheting words!!
Them suckers can be dangerous!!
Nice to see ya!