Waddaya think? I just rote this in 37 seconds and I didden even edit it. Matte of fact, I diden even read it 2?

L5 totally makes this verse stand out

the pause achieved by putting "Either"

on it's own line is both dramatic and effective

I do believe you have forged a new trail for the

poets of Yahhoville to follow...

She raises an eyebrow and coughs...um...you said nobody ever praises you so...um... I thought I would =)

Not bad, but the record is 24 seconds. Maybe some exercises...

'k...you're allowed a lil timeout occasionally Jeff. This is your 37 seconds of fame..enjoy it. Averaging 7+ seconds per line. How come you typed Either so slow? lol

duuudddeee....you should get an award for this piece of genius. lol

jk

wow, you must really be bored. heheh

:))

you should check out my lame free verse i wrote off the top of my head. Yours took a little longer to write though. lol. jk

http://ca.answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=At...

Needs work.

Well, mister, it DOES make sense to me, so I'll just gather my things and wait....

Uh... eh ,, (clearing my throat...)

violence is blue

trouble is red

I think I understood

what I read...

17 seconds... maybe.

Yes but violence is indigo--it's a common mistake.

No man, it makes no sense to me. Violence is blue? LMAO. You're so lame, man. So... lame.

Very profound - lol. x