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What Do You Think of My Lyrics?

It's called Black Chromatic. Honest Feedback please :)

Verse 1:

I have an addiction to something I'll never get.

I have a confusion of why I really had left.

A little depression can go a long way.

And deprivation is what I feel everyday.

It's been raining for a while outside.

By now you'd think I'd see a rainbow.

Aren't they supposed to be colorful?

Not something that's supposed to hide.

Why do I see the sky black?

Everybody else see's it in color.

I feel like I'm in some old photograph.

But I'm crazy and I wonder...

Chorus:

Am I going color blind?

Am I just losing my mind?

Peace is supposed to be serene.

Colors should just intervene.

The clouds are black.

Too much darkness when I'm supposed to be optimistic.

Is there such a thing as black chromatic?

Verse 2:

I have a problem: I'm going idiotic.

My decision is to stop trying to be perfect.

The temptation is serious.

Then again, I'm delirious.

A rainbow is so delicate.

And black clouds take over.

And it's juat hypnotizing me.

Deprivation ain't givin me closure.

Why do I see the sky black?

Everyone else see's it in color.

I feel like I'm in some old photograph.

Colors come on over.

Chorus.

Verse 3:

I'll light a fuse.

I'll tell the news.

In color.

I'll use what I got.

If I like it or not.

In color.

An old photograph

covered in black.

Not color.

Murky an gloomy.

Not color.

I'm in a fluster.

Chorus (2x)

I see a glimmer of me in an incentive.

For getting black chromatic.

So what do you think?

Update:

No I do not like Twilight. In fact, I hate it.

Update 2:

I'm a rocker; I love 80s glam, punk, contemporary hard rock, 70s metal/hard rock, doom metal and death metal, but I also like blues. I guess I write dark because I like some doom and death metal. I guess I'm a little goth but I'm for sure NOT EMO.

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  • 1 decade ago
    Favorite Answer

    that's really nice, keep it up , good luck!!!

  • 1 decade ago

    It's a little depressing, are you emo or gothic by any chance?

    Just for a little advice try and make it a bit more exciting.

    I'm sorry I didn't love it and you sure have a major talent! Just keep

    trying! I bet it would be a hit!

    But it is just not for me! Bye!

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Pretty original and in your face actually. The imagery is really front and center, The only thing i thought was dumb is the line "stop trying to be perfect". whenever anyone calls themselves a perfectionist or similar, they're really just complimenting themselves in a backhanded way. I would modify thyat line

  • 1 decade ago

    I like it I think some words was said to rhyme, but I think that I have felt that way many times! A very good song I can see it being played my guitar.

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  • 1 decade ago

    Awesome, I love your lyrics! I would love to know what the musics like tho! Good work!

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Everything is Black... Not color..

    I have a problem: I'm going idiotic.

  • 1 decade ago

    Its really good and deep, slightly sad though

    Good Job

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Good, sounds cool

  • 1 decade ago

    Really good lyrics... I can't for the life of me get the rhythm of the beat though... :D

  • 1 decade ago

    i think its pretty good, i just would like to know what the music would sound like

  • 1 decade ago

    emo. generic. was this written by a "tween" who loves twilight?

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